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Joined: May 2006 Posts: 4226
Location: Steeler Nation, Hudson Valley Contingent | Last November I posted a song I wrote for my Mom and that I played at her funeral. I made the recording soon after and had to step away from it for a bit as the emotions were pretty raw. Several of you had kind things to say about it. But after finally listening again, I felt it could sound better than the recording as it was.
I guess it was no surprise that the original sounded, well, a bit grief-stricken frankly. And the song is supposed to be more resolute and hopeful.
From a technical recording standpoint, I didn't do too much; reduced the bass, added a bit of reverb, and plugged in to the recorder for a clean sound. The biggest difference is two-fold: 1.) I didn't overdub. This piece is meant to be felt, even while sung. So what you hear is similar to how it would sound if I was sitting there playing it for you (in a large acoustic setting). 2.) I decided after much thought to change the key from G to A.
So let me know what you think. Better? Worse? Also, be aware that it is a religious piece. Please take that into account before clicking the link.
Thank you kindly everyone. I Will Fly
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Joined: January 2006 Posts: 2120
Location: Chicago | The vocal on this is clear and steady, Patch. A pleasure to listen to. Great guitar sound, too. My only "two cents" is that it needs a chorus or "bridge" (middle 8) to bring variety to the A chord feel. Hey, could even be an instrumental solo, some nice chords that travel and take you back. Interesting, I just finished Robert Monroe's trilogy. Talk about "flying"!
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Joined: July 2005 Posts: 3410
Location: GA USA | If not a bridge, maybe just an extra 8 beats between verses 2 and 3. It sounds just like it's live in a large acoustic setting, so you nailed that. Very nice. |
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Joined: December 2003 Posts: 66
Location: Minnesota | Beautiful Patrick! It sounds wonderful the way it is but Dobro may have something with that little bit of insturmental to make it soar.
It was a pleasure to listen to. Thank you for sharing. |
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Joined: October 2012 Posts: 349
Location: Denver, CO | What a wonderful song! I always wish I could write positive and joyful devotional songs, but mine all come out sounding like the blues. I would love to see you perform this one someday. |
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Joined: December 2004 Posts: 2150
Location: Orlando, FL | Beautifully done Patch! Very moving. |
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Joined: July 2003 Posts: 3111
Location: Nashville TN. | Agreeded moving it is. |
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